What aspects of the essay did you find hard to understand or unclear?:

You have explained clearly what you were trying to say. However, there is one thing that confused me. Are you writing a proposal or an essay? In addition, you have written ‘’chapter of interest’’ too many times. You have also used too many transition words.

What might be the appropriate ‘next steps’ for my essay? Does this research need improvement? What should I do with it?:

First of all, since I don’t know the instructions, you should go through the instructions of your assignment and review your solution. Ask yourself: does my proposal answer every question asked in the instructions? Does it meet every requirement? Then, you need to reduce the number of transition words. You have used them excessively. Correct your grammar and pronunciation. I am unable to tell you about whether you have conducted the research properly or not because I don’t know the instructions. Still, your paper is fine from my perspective. It just needs a little furnishing. Reduce the number of commas and add where they are necessary.