Reading often triggers memories of personal experiences. After reading several narratives about growing up — Maya Angelou’s “Momma, the Dentist, and Me” (p. 293) and Dick Gregory’s “Shame” (p. 145), in particular — and discussing with her classmates how memorable events often signal significant changes in life, student Trena Isley decided to write a narrative about such a turning point in her own life. Isley focused on the day she told her father that she no longer wished to participate in sports. Recalling that event led her to reconsider her childhood experiences of running track. Isley welcomed the opportunity to write about this difficult period in her life. As she tried to make her dilemma clear to her classmates, she found that she clarified it for herself. She came to a deeper understanding of her own fears and feelings about striking out on her own and ultimately to a better appreciation of her difficult relationship with her father. What follows is the final draft of Isley’s essay.
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A Response Essay
For an assignment following James Lincoln Collier’s essay “Anxiety: Challenge by Another Name” (p. 85), Zoe Ockenga tackled the topic of anxiety. In her first draft, she explored how anxious she felt the night before her first speech in a public speaking class and how in confronting that anxiety she benefited from the course. Ockenga read her essay aloud in class, and other students had an opportunity to ask her questions and to offer constructive criticism. Several students suggested that she might want to relate her experiences to those that Collier recounts in his essay. Another asked if she could include other examples to bolster the point she wanted to make. At this point in the discussion, Ockenga recalled a phone conversation she had had with her mother regarding her mother’s indecision about accepting a new job. The thought of working outside the home for the first time in more than twenty years brought out her mother’s worst fears and threatened to keep her from accepting the challenge. Armed with these valuable suggestions and ideas, Ockenga began revising. In subsequent drafts, she worked on the Collier connection, actually citing his essay on several occasions, and developed the example of the anxiety surrounding her mother’s decision. What follows is the final draft of her essay, which incorporates the changes she made based on the peer evaluation of her first draft.
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An Argumentative Essay
James Duffy’s assignment was to write a thesis-driven argument, and he was free to choose his own topic. He knew from past experience that to write a good essay, he would have to write on a topic he cared about. He also knew that he should allow himself a reasonable amount of time to find a topic and to gather his ideas. A premedical student, James found himself reading essays online and in the library that had a scientific bent. An essay in the August 8, 1983, issue of Newsweek entitled “A Crime of Compassion” by Barbara Huttmann caught his eye because it dealt with the issues of the right to die and pain treatment in terminally ill patients, issues that he would be confronting as a medical doctor.
James wrote this particular essay on a patient’s right to choose death during the second half of the semester, after he had read a number of model arguments and had learned the importance of incorporating such elements as good paragraphing, unity, and transitions in his earlier essays. He began by brainstorming about his topic: he made lists of all the ideas, facts, issues, arguments, opposing arguments, and refutations that came to mind as a result of his own firsthand experiences with dying patients while on an internship. When he was confident that he had amassed enough information to begin writing, he made a rough outline of an organizational plan and then wrote a first draft of his essay. After conferencing with several peers as well as his instructor, James revised what he had written.
The final draft of James’s essay illustrates that he had learned how the parts of a well- written essay fit together and how to make revisions that emulate some of the qualities in the model essays he had read and studied. The following is the final draft of James’s essay.