English-Final Draft of Essay #3

1) Will readers recognize the story that is the subject of the paper?  Has the writer stated the title and author of the work at (or very near) the beginning of the introduction? - The author does a good job of explaining the topic of the paper as well as ensuring the title and the author of the work are in the intro, 

2) Does the introduction adequately prepare readers for the writer’s argument?  Do readers need a brief summary of the story’s plot?  Or do you feel that the essay contains too much plot summary rather than argument? - The introduction is good as it gives us a brief summary. I feel the argument Is kind of lost within the plot summart. 

3) Evaluate the thesis statement.  How adequately does it forecast the argument (let readers know what argument to expect in the body of the essay)? - I recommend touching up the thesis as the reader may be a little unsure of what the thesis is.  

4) Does each topic sentence express a supporting argument (not a factual statement that a reader cannot argue against) related to the thesis? - So far the topic sentences make sense and can support an argument.  

5) Where do any reasons (supporting points) the writer use seem too superficial (not important enough)?  - It is too early to comment as there isn’t enough paragraphs to know if things are not important. 

6) Do any paragraphs begin with summary or quotation?  Remind your classmate that paragraphs should begin with topic sentences that state supporting arguments. - None of the paragraphs begin with summaries or quotations. 

7) Evaluate the argument as a chain of reasons.  Does each point/body paragraph logically “link” to the next point/paragraph?  Suggest how the organization could be improved. - The paragraphs do link with one another and make sense. 

8) Where does the support seem skimpy?  Where does the writer need to include more specific details from the story?  What else can the writer say about these reasons?  - Many supporting paragraphs are missing to further the argument being made.  

9) Does the writer include sufficient quotations from the novel to make a convincing argument?     - More quotations are needed. 

10) Does the writer explain/interpret any quotations in his or her own words?  Where does he or she need to provide more explanation or interpretation of quotations?  Do any concepts need to be defined? - More quotations will strengthen the argument, as well as explaining the connection between the quote and the argument. 

11) Does the connection between a reason and its support (the specific example) seem vague or otherwise unclear?  If so, where?  How might the writer clarify this connection? - So far the author makes clear connections based on the argument given. 

12) Are there contradictions or gaps (holes!) in the writer’s argument?  If so, where?  Will explaining a point resolve the contradiction?  Or, should the writer eliminate the contradicting point altogether? If there are gaps in the argument, what is missing from the argument?  Suggest what else the writer might discuss. - There are gaps within the essay as it is a rough draft and does seem to be missing quite a bit. 

13)  Is the essay formatted to MLA guidelines?  If not, please identify missing or incorrect elements. - Works Cited is missing 

14)  Is there a Works Cited?  Does the Works Cited contain a complete entry? - No Works Cited