Food for Whom?
Food and eating are closely related to human lives. In the late 1970s, the Finns were overconsuming massive amounts of sodium, eating on average more than two teaspoons of salt a day. Consequently, the country had developed significant issues with hypertension, and men of Finland had the highest rate of fatal heart disease in the world. (Moss) Include consuming the sodium, overconsuming fat and sugar are fatal to the person. However, the Big food companies continue to serve fatness sugary and salty foods. The food industry puts the customers in the obesity crisis and it affects our environment as well as our bodies.
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The food companies offer to the addict is the fat, sugar and salt causing or at least heavily contributing to the obesity crisis. They earn the income they make the devoid nutrients snacks, instant food, junk food and processed foods. First, too much sugary foods lead to diabetes. According to Micahel Moss, “The Extraordinary Science of Addictive Junk Food,” he insists nowadays, one in three adults is careful clinically overweight, “Accompanied by one in five kids, and 24 million Americans are afflicted by type 2 diabetes, with another 79 million people having pre-diabetes.” And eating salty food or consuming taking more than a recommended amount of salt per day, you can get high blood pleasure.
Your point in this paragraph was that food companies are putting a lot of sugar, salt, and fat in our food to addict us, but you don’t include any evidence of that.
If we reduce the amount of salt we eat, we can prevent disease. In Moss’s article, Heikki Karppanen said, Finland’s per capita consumption of salt had dropped by a third, and this shift was attended by a 75 percent to 80 percent decline in the number of deaths heart disease. The above example shows the effect of a small amount of salt intake. Finally, fatty foods cause obesity. This is a new point. You were talking about salt. Finishing talking about salt and then start a new paragraph to explain the effect of fatty foods. (Moss) In Freedman’s article, “How Junk Food Can End Obesity,” The Atlantic Daily, many of big food’s most popular products are loaded with terrible quantities of fat and the plentitude of these components, aggravated by large portion sizes, has clearly helped stimulate the obesity crisis. (Freedman) In the Michael Pollan’s article “Our National Eating Disorder,” The New York Times Magazine, Rozin, a University of Pennsylvania psychologist and Fischler, a French sociologist, say that our precarious diet can be part of American food, and more relaxed and social access to our diet can be harmful to our health. (Pollan) This evidence isn’t related to your point about fatty food.
Consumers should try to reduce the three ingredients. In contrast, the food provided by companies is usually salty, sugary and fattening. They are to earn the income they make the devoid nutrients snacks, instant food, junk food and processed foods. In Moss’s article “The Extraordinary Science of Addictive Junk Food,” Michael Moss insists the food companies have recognized for periods that sugary, salty, fatty foods are not good for consumers in the quantities that customers eat them. He said that the stuff does contain, is more than three times the fat content per ounce as the beef patty in a Big Mac (more than two-thirds of the calories come from fat), and four times the sodium. This is largely true of the Big Mac as well as almost any instant food. (Moss) Isn’t this a paraphrase of Freedman? What “stuff” are you referring to?
Not only that, companies offering higher-calorie food provide us with access to affordable food wherever possible. In Freedman’s article “How Junk Food Can End Obesity,” David H. Freedman could get delicious blueberry-pomegranate smoothie anywhere and it cost $3 and took only seconds to make. He said, “At least that’s what the most-prominent voices in our food culture today would have you believe.” In his article, some researchers show that people who eat wholesomely tend to be healthier than those who survive on fast food and processed foods. Like Friedman, we are accustomed to getting instant foods anywhere. (Freedman) Finish tying back to your thesis. What does the evidence in this paragraph have to do with obesity?
Not only can we get food easily in many places, we can obtain at low prices. In the Karen Auge’s article “Spoiled System: Eating Healthier Comes with a Price for Families,” the Revisha Martinez insists eating healthy food has turned to eat expensive foods. And she said that the cost of one peach per family was equal to 18 servings of the cost of macaroni and cheese. Other consumers like her also buy less expensive and sensational junk food than fresh fruits and vegetables. Referring to Bonnie Azab Powell, “Infoporn: Ground Zero of the Obesity Epidemic? The Center of Your Grocery Storen,” in the most chain supermarkets are preparation products. Processed foods are in the middle (they are located in places that are easy to find), and they are high in energy density. In contrast, the wholesome foods are high priced than processed foods. In Powell’s chart, the chart is showing the price and the calories offered by the production. High-calorie snacks, cereal, and pasta show that they are selling at low prices. Although the two articles affect the food industry selling high-calorie food to consumers at low prices. Finish tying back to your thesis. What does the evidence in this paragraph have to do with obesity?
But these stimulating and low-cost processing foods do not only clog our bodies, but also harm our environment. In the article “What's wrong with what we eat?” TED TALK, according to the Bittman, we need to cut down on meat and instant consumption. After energy production, livestock is the second biggest contributor to air pollution. 1/5 of global warming gases are produced in livestock production. The author said that this is more than the traffic comes from. Livestock is also one of the biggest culprits in causing soil contamination, air pollution, water pollution, water shortages and the diversity of biodiversity. Western culture of diet and life causes diabetes, heart disease, stroke, and cancer. The demand for meat, dairy products, and carbohydrates in the United States consumes lots of calories. He said, “Overconsumption of animals, and of course, junk food, is the problem, along with our paltry consumption of plants.” He also insisted if we increase the intake of plants instead of eating meat, our bodies will become healthier and the environment will become more pleasant. He argued that we should stop raising livestock for everyone's interests. It will not only help us reduce the calories we eat, but also reduce our carbon footprint.
If we reduce the amount of junk food or processed foods, including salt, sugar, and fat we eat, there will be something surprising about us. We should eat less meat and junk foods (including processed foods and instant foods) and consume more plants (it's not the beta-carotene, it's the carrot) for our environment. In Moss’s article “The Extraordinary Science of Addictive Junk Food,” Michael Moss insists the food companies have recognized for periods that sugary, salty, fatty foods are not good for consumers in the quantities that customers eat them. He said “the stuff does contain, is more than three times the fat content per ounce as the beef patty in a Big Mac (more than two-thirds of the calories come from fat), and four times the sodium. This is largely true of the Big Mac as well as almost any instant food.” (Moss) You already used this quote. Also, I think it belongs to Freedman. Through various solutions, let’s try to live in a healthy environment with a healthy mind to think our environment and healthy body from eating fresh vegetables instead of consuming meats.
Work Cited
Augé, Karen. “Spoiled system: Eating healthier comes with a price for families.” The Denver Post, 5 May 2016, www.denverpost.com/2010/09/04/spoiled-syst/.
Bittman, Mark. “What's wrong with what we eat".” TED Talk, Dec 2007, www.ted.com/talks/mark_bittman_on_what_s_wrong_with_what_we_eat/.
Freedman, David H. “How Junk Food Can End Obesity.” The Atlantic, Atlantic Media Company, 19 Feb 2014, www.theatlantic.com/magazine/archive/2013/07/how-junk-food-can-end-obesity/309396/.
Moss, Michael. “The Extraordinary Science of Addictive Junk Food.” The New York Times, 23 Feb 2013, www.nytimes.com/2013/02/24/magazine/the-extraordinary-science-of-junk-food/.
Pollan Michael, “Our National Eating Disorder.” The New York Times Magazine, 17 Oct 2004, www. Michaelpollan.com/articles-archive/our-national-eating-disorder/.
Powell, Bonnie Azab. “Infoporn: Ground Zero of the Obesity Epidemic? The Center of Your Grocery Store.” Wired, Conde Nast, 12 Dec 2007, www.wired.com/2007/12/infoporn-ground-zero-obesity-epidemic-center-grocery-store/