Maria Jesusa Bowmer
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Personal Narrative: Story of my Life
When I was in grade 1, my dad and my mom were always there for me to go to school.
I always ask them to stay by my side because I was scared that someone is gonnagoing to hurt
me and I was scared that my dad gonnagoing to go somewhere and not gonnagoing to come
back because that day I know that my and my brother is planning to go to Hawaii. I was really
close to my dad before., he He always bring me toys whenever he go, and he always ask me what
I want. My mom is always there for me too when I needed help about my school project. Every
day before I to go school my mom always cook breakfast for me and for my brother and me;, she
always say that we need to eat a lot of food so that we can concentrate studying all of our lessons
in school.
Since the day I know what is going on about my dad and my brother moving to Hawaii
that is the day that I started following my dad whenever he go because I know from that day I'm
not gonnagoing to see my dad for so long and I know that my dad really need to move to Hawaii
to give me and my mom and me a better life. My dad noticed something is wrong to with me
because I always ask him to stay by my side, sleep by my side, and not gonnagoing to leave me.
He's the one taught me how to protect myself when someone gonnagoing to hurt me, and he's the
one taught me how to fight back when someone bullying me. The day that get got closer for him
to move to Hawaii my dad always spend time with me riding into my bike, swimming, and
playing badminton outside of the house.
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Comment [CS2]: Avoid giving only a list of general information or a diary account in the essay. That type of “catalog” approach lacks reader appeal
and doesn’t help you to develop your personalized
focus on the experience. Following the opening
sentence, the introductory paragraph should solidify
your topic and your approach, setting the tone for
the remainder of the essay.