Running head: READER RESPONSE ESSAY 1
The Crane Wife by CJ Hauser
Kadia Williams
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The Crane Wife by CJ Hauser
CJ Hauser, in her essay "The Crane Wife," Hauser is talking about two different stories,
but they work coherently together. At the beginning of her text, she says how she had called off
her engagement ten days before her wedding with her then-fiancé, and she immediately wants to
go to the gulf coast of Texas on a scientific expedition. She then gives an account of the
whooping crane expedition and starts by introducing the people she was traveling with in their
sizeable white van, they were Jeff, Jan, who was a retired geophysicist, warren who was a
bachelor and Lindsay. Their main reason for their expedition was to save the cranes by giving
them food, water, and shelter. As her story continues, she keeps switching from her wedding,
which she called off to the expedition. During her journey, she came upon a book that she found
at a gift shop, called "The Crane Wife,” a Japanese story that is almost entirely related to her
relationship.
Hauser fiancé is seen to be passive in their relationship, and he cannot see the things
which Hauser needs to feel complete in the relationship and what makes her happy as a woman.
Hauser explains one particular time she had put on her favorite red dress for a wedding and her
desire to feel sexy, she exploded to show her fiancé. But he dismisses her by staring at his phone,
All she wanted at that moment was for him to tell her nice she looked. Hauser did not get any
compliment until she forced one on him (The Paris Review). His only explanation was that he
had seen her previously in that dress, and there was no need of him repeating. For any woman to
experience, this is quite shattering not to get the attention a woman deserves, and he should have
at least done more.
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Hauser, upon reading the Japanese folk tale "The Crane Wife," which a man is tricked
into believing she is a woman by the crane. It plucks its feathers one by one every night and
could not see it was ruining her because even at night, she does not sleep. Just like the crane,
when Hauser does not get the things she needs, she plucks them so that she may be seen she does
not require a lot. She writes, "I did not want to feel like the kind of nagging woman who might
exist in a sitcom," This is not a good thing to do because eventually, she would deprive herself
of all the needs which make her happy as a person.
Many online results show that women tend to be afraid of being needy or too weak in
their relationship either in a husband and wife status or a boyfriend and girlfriend status (Google
Research). Experts say that men in their nature will always want to feel needed by their women
only to the extent of them feeling nice and should not reach the degree, which makes the man
feel insecure.
Many therapists could suggest that women should sometimes learn to have ways to have
their needs met without the man realizing that something has been asked from him. This would
give any women the edge of getting many things she wants without feeling deprived of their
wants and needs in any relationship.
The situation is explained that women should master the essential skills to survive in a
heterosexual relationship, not forgetting to get married to their best friend. Women tend to offer
their men what they need and to satisfy them, and in turn, the men in that marriage are expected
to provide the support she needs, not forgetting security.
Hauser was right in doing two things, abandoning her fiancé and going to the whooping
crane expedition. Her fiancé did not appreciate her. His decision to marry her is a surprise
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reads, not reading
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Running head: READER RESPONSE ESSAY 4
because she had been manipulated into knowing she should be comfortable with not needing
much to please her husband (The Paris Review, 2019). At this point, he does not deserve her. If
he truly loves her, he should have shown her unconditional support to her and he should have
been keen on her needs.
The second part, even though she had doubts about going on the trip after she called off
her wedding, it was the best thing that could have happened to her. The trip gave her a chance to
reflect on herself after the significant decision she made and also to be able not to deprive herself
of the need to do something she wants.
The essay is intriguing the way Hauser used different stories and merging them to the
same context without deviating from the story and message she meant to pass with a piece of
literature. The story is highly recommendable to other readers as it gives different situations in
her relationship, Hauser also hints to the point of defining a toxic relationship where women are
seen depriving themselves of their needs only to save their relationship.
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This sentence should be your thesis statement and the body paragraphs should help to prove that the essay is intriguing.
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References
The Paris Review https://www.theparisreview.org/blog/2019/07/16/the-crane-wife/
https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/romance-redux/201211/five-ways-overcome-feelings-
neediness
https://www.theparisreview.org/blog/2019/07/16/the-crane-wife/
https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/romance-redux/201211/five-ways-overcome-feelings-neediness
https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/romance-redux/201211/five-ways-overcome-feelings-neediness
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