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Comment [CS4]: Ensure the consistency in the use of tense. Here past tense is ideal.

When I'm in grade 2 my mom is laughing to my dad because my dad is drunk at that time

and he dance in front of my mom. It was the best day of my life because I never see my dad

dancing at all. My dad always working works just to give me what I want and I appreciate that.,

he He always pickpicks me up in school to go somewhere to buy a gift to surprise my mom. My

dad and I always plan to surprise my mom, we decorate the balcony and put a lot of candles and

roses into the ground and into the table and I told to my dad that one day hopefully I found a guy

like my dad who is romantic and sweet my dad is laughing because he told me that I'm way too

young to think about love. He told me not to enter any kind of a relationship when I'm young

because he wan'twant me to have a better life and enjoy spending time with them. I remember

when my dad and my mom always telling me to be nice to my classmate and other people so I

can have a lot of friends at the end of the day. My dad and my mom is aare hard working parents

I know that because I always see them both doing something to support me and my brother, they

always say that don't waste our food because they keep saying that one day when we have our

own family we really know why they keep reminding or say that words to me and to my brother

how important life is and how hard to find a money to support the family. I told to my parents

that I hope one day when I'm into the right age and I only want to get married once like them

because seeing them together happy and knowing that my dad is my mom first and last boyfriend

and my mom is my dad first and last girlfriend till they get married. I also told them that because

I see my cousin have a broken family which is hard for her, I told to my dad I don't want that to

happen to me or to my brother. My dad promise me in front of my mom that he will never cheat

on my mom and he will never let someone to break our family and till now he prove and keep

that promises to my family. My mom's dad is always telling me to respect my parents because

Comment [CS5]: The writing is difficult to follow when they tend to be incomplete, run-ons or grammatically inconsistent.

Comment [CS6]: You need to really work hard at improving your grammar, writing clear sentences

with appropriate punctuation and word choice. Some

of the sentences are not clear and fail to make sense.

Comment [CS7]: You seem to have an issue with the punctuations, word choice and run on

sentence/comma splice. In case there are two or

more independent clauses pertaining to related ideas in a sentence, they must be either separated by

semicolons or joined with a conjunction to avoid

creating a run-on sentence/ comma splice. At times,

you have provided incomplete information which

leaves the reader in the dark. Provide enough

explanation for your ideas in a grammatically

consistent manner for the reader to understand your

points.